correcting a paper that discusses whether artificial intelligence-generated papers should be allowed to be submitted in K-12 or college classes.

Could you fix this paper? The subject is Should any K-12 or college class allow artificial intelligence-generated papers to be submitted? I have done a rough draft of the paper, but many things need to be corrected such as the sources and grammar. These are the requirements.
— You MUST use the previously created thesis for the essay or lose ten points off the top.
— 800-1000 words
— MLA format
— no first or second pronouns
— credible sources: 2 database, 1 website, and 1 uncommon
— Word file
(Attached is the essay)
(2nd attachment is corrections that need to be made)
You can either restart the whole essay (Just use thesis and 3 points I made) or you can correct my rough draft. Almost all my sources are invalid so you would need fix that. Please make sure all requirements are met.